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3 Brilliant Copywriting Formulas for Crafting More Persuasive Landing Pages

You know that telling a story is a great way to write high-converting landing page copy. Thing is, you might not fancy yourself much of a storyteller. As much as you appreciate a good tale, when you go to spin one yourself, your words fall flat (and so do your conversions).

But what if there was a formula you could follow to piece together a compelling narrative that’s sure to resonate with your ideal customer?

Better yet, what if there was an entire toolbox of formulas you could use?

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In our latest Unwebinar, expert copywriter and Write With Influence founder Amy Harrison shared three easy-to-follow-but-super-effective formulas for piecing together a captivating story on your landing page.

Watch the webinar recording here, or keep reading for a summary of three new formulas for your landing page copywriting toolbox.

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Tell a story no one’s heard before

The story you tell on your landing page should be compelling, but Amy explained that it also has to be unique:

You want to show that what you have is valuable, but also different from the competition.

Even for verticals like real estate where offerings are similar across competitors, you can still stand out by telling a different story.

Easier said than done, though, right? But Amy’s got a tool to help.

Tool: Combination Uniqueness, AKA The Headline Shaker Maker

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Image via Amy Harrison’s recent Unwebinar.

The table above allows you to break down each of your product or service’s features, along with all the ways it impacts your customers: results, opportunities, problems solved and emotional benefits. And then there’s a column for adding a smidgen of urgency to your offer.

Here’s a table she filled out for a client who offers English courses for international businesses:

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Image via Amy Harrison’s recent Unwebinar.

Amy explained that while you might have similar features to your competitors, laying out all the key elements of your product or service like this allows you to reveal unique elements that you can highlight in your landing page copy.

These were the elements she identified as being most important to her client’s prospects:

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Image via Amy Harrison’s recent Unwebinar.

With that, Amy was able to put together a strong unique value proposition statement — which she explained is an important building block for writing strong landing page headlines in particular:

Instead of coming up with a headline out of thin air, we’re taking a couple of steps to highlight things that you know are important to your customer.

In other words, instead of having to write headlines based on everything you know about your product, you can craft it out of a few key pieces. The result? Super-targeted, unique headlines that are sure to woo prospects.

Here are some of the headlines she wrote for her client, based on the highlighted elements above:

  • Compete for (and Win) New Business Internationally with Workforce Fluent in English
  • ABC English for Employees: Helping your Business Expand into New Markets
  • See Employees Using English Accurately and Confidently in Just 6 Weeks

Amy explained that these headlines will help her client stand out from competitors offering this service, who might have plain headlines like, “English Classes for Employees.”

Her headlines are targeted to a customer’s interest, which helps the headline sound unique by striking to the heart of what the customer wants.

Or as Amy puts it:

Tell a story that cuts deep with prospects

If you want prospects to believe that you have the solution to their problem, then you need to show them that you understand that problem to begin with.

And as Amy explained, this can be achieved by speaking to your visitor’s symptoms.

Tool: Use symptoms in your copy

Symptoms, Amy explained, are “vivid situations that occur in your customer’s life as a result of the problem that you solve.” While a doctor may know that a flu is the problem, a patient uses different, symptom-based language: they describe their fever, lethargy and aching bones.

Incorporating symptoms into your copy is an effective strategy because they:

  • Get prospects nodding along with you.
  • Show prospects that you have a super intimate understanding of their problem, which makes them more likely to be receptive of your solution.

Amy illustrated with a poor example from another one of her clients, an analytics firm:

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Image via Amy Harrison’s recent Unwebinar.

The issue with the excerpt above is that it leads with the solution without first identifying with the visitor’s symptoms. This is problematic because the company’s competitors offer that same solution. There’s nothing to distinguish the two competitors in the mind of the visitor.

But here’s a rewrite of the above, instead leading with the symptoms of the prospect’s problem:

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Image via Amy Harrison’s recent Unwebinar.

This copy highlights a specific symptom that will get prospects nodding their head “yes” and feeling like this firm understands their problem and is uniquely qualified to offer a solution.

Amy also shared a formula for incorporating symptoms naturally into your landing page narrative:

  1. Here’s what you may have recognized (symptoms)
  2. Here’s what causing them (problem)
  3. Here’s what you need to do (cure)
  4. Here’s what’s possible if you do (results)

What does this look like in practice?

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Image via Amy Harrison’s recent Unwebinar.

Showing this depth of understanding demonstrates to prospects that you understand where you’re coming from — and it paints you as an expert.

Tell a story with a happy ending

As much as you want to show prospects that you understand how their problem impacts their life now, you also want to paint a picture of how things could be with the help of your solution.

Aaaand you may have guessed it, but Amy’s got a tool for that, too.

Tool: The Impact Table

The Impact Table is a tool that Amy uses to take each feature and clearly articulate what the impact will be on prospects’ lives — on both a practical and emotional level:

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Features are hard facts about your service of product, whereas Results and Emotion are the benefits it brings prospects. Image via Amy Harrison’s recent Unwebinar.

As Amy puts it:

An Impact Table gives you an at-a-glance view of the transformation you provide to customers – while showing how you do it.

Here’s the Impact Table in action, using an example of a conference company that holds many conferences each year. Note that Amy filled the table out for a single feature:

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Image via Amy Harrison’s recent Unwebinar.

Amy explained that looking at these individual elements makes it easier for you to then build out sentences for your landing page:

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Image via Amy Harrison’s recent Unwebinar.

Here’s an example of copy that she put together for the conference company, based on their Impact Table above:

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Image via Amy Harrison’s recent Unwebinar.

Using the Impact Table ensures that you write landing page copy that speaks to the things that customers are truly interested in. And Amy encouraged attendees to be as specific as possible:

The more specific you are, the more persuasive your landing page copy will be.

Will your landing pages have a happy ending?

Most authors won’t sit down to write a story without having some vision of the beginning, middle and end.

Similarly, before you can tell a unique and compelling story on your landing page, you need to know all your plot points: the things prospects need to hear in order to convert — which is exactly what Amy’s copywriting formulas will help you uncover.

Happy writing!

About Amanda Durepos
Amanda Durepos is Unbounce’s Blog Editor and an aspiring dog owner. Former gallery director and freelance blogger, she has a love for curating great content. Find her on Twitter: @amandadurepos
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Comments:

  1. Cristina Moody

    Thank you for these great advices! There’s no question that landing pages — and the lead-capture forms that come with them — are two of the most important elements of lead generation. Without them, marketers would be much more limited in their ability to convert website visitors into leads — and generate reconversions, too

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  2. Steven Eisen

    Amanda and Amy – Thank you both for the fine collaboration.

    Amy – I am so happy to find out that I can use “process tables” like yours to kick my creativity up a notch. Up until now, I felt that using tables was mostly just for analytical purposes.

    Thank you for making me feel like I can get more out of my right brain…and be more confident in my creative copywriting pursuits. What a fine approach you have. I am grateful you have shared it with us! That was very generous of you.

    Happy Holidays!

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  3. Amy

    Wow – thanks so much for this blow-by-blow account of the webinar! It was such good fun putting it together for Unbounce and you’re awesome audience!

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    • Amanda Durepos

      Thank YOU Amy. Definitely one of the most actionable webinars I’ve ever seen.

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  4. Dan Neamtu

    Thank Amanda you for sharing this article with information about visitor’s Symptoms and The Impact Table that perform better on Landing page. It’s very useful, also I love Amy’s How to Write Killer Landing Page video. Great advices!

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  5. sayed

    Hi Amanda,

    The breakdown is good in the post. The way you explained was easy to understand.

    It seem like moreover what a writer needs to keep in mind while writing a copy for a page.

    Most of the time the equation is dis-balanced as either a page misses out conceptual terms ( which you explained ), persuasive terms ( that motivates, promises and delivers) and marketing terms of their content.

    Its hard to balance the equation overall. But that’s where a good copy writers credibility comes in :)

    Thanks for the post. Enjoyed it.

    Best,
    Sayed

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  6. Lincoln Augustine

    Wow! Amy, thanks a bunch for this great insight. This is exactly what I had been searching for. This is practical and well described. May you never lack in wisdom and knowledge. Keep it up, Amy.

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  7. John Payne

    Thank you, Amy, for an excellent webinar.

    It’s about so much more than just producing a landing page. It’s more like a mini-course in Sales, Marketing and human relationships!

    The principles you’ve highlighted apply to advertising copy, to a salesperson in a retail store, or convincing the spouse about a particular purchase.

    I’ll be specifically using some of the techniques for preparing a landing page fora client who sells double glazed windows and doors.

    Thank you so much,

    Cheers,

    John

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  8. Moon Ali

    These fomulas are really awesome to improve the quality of your website and create a friendly relation with search engine because google loves to crawl and index unique ideas.Thanks Amanda

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  9. imran

    Wow! amazing thing i find. This is exactly what I had been searching for. This is practical and well described. May you never lack in wisdom and knowledge. dear please, Keep it up!
    regards:
    imran

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  10. Goku

    Amanda Durepos you really described well these 3 formulas for Crafting More Persuasive Landing Pages. Landing pages work like a magnet to get money now a days. Thanks

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  11. Hannah Kalmes

    Great article! I look forward to putting these strategies into play, especially the impact table.

    Thanks!

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  12. Robert Lang

    Where can I download the blank “The Headline Shaker Maker” Form, spreadsheet, or doc? Is there one available or do we need to make our own?

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